Writing help: good words to use?

[MoFo]

Don't mind this thread but I am stuck.
I'm writing a snarky critical response to a gallery review assuming that it's going to be published.

My paragraph is:

***Russell ___1___ states “to be presented with the idea [of what a piece of art in a gallery is trying to express] you have to read the curator’s explanation.” Now, the last time I checked, there was something called freedom in this city and I don’t remember this freedom being ___2____ in a gallery situation. The choice to look away from the textual explanations displayed by the institution is still valid (and quite effortless) unlike passing by a bloody scene of an accident on the 401.***

For WORD 1, I'd like an adverb that tells the reader that he made that statement without any objectivity. That what he thinks is fact is just his generalization.

And for WORD 2, I am stuck on a word that means "to block." Specifically, in regards to one's free-will or freedom.

I was thinking "hindered?" Or "stopped?" Confused a little.

 

[stir-fry]

1. inexplorably ??

2. violated ?


i really want to look up number 1, but dictionary.com seems to be down for me.

 

[jebac]

ok, i just noticed you have over 30,000 posts...

-jebac

 

[MoFo]

Originally posted by stir-fry
1. inexplorably ??

Looked it up. It's not a word.
But "violated" is good! Let me try it.

Thank you.

 

[labRat]

tribelibs!!!!

1. retardedly
2. oppressed

-or-

1. , with a plunger stuck up his arse,
2. frenched

 

[MoFo]

Can you oppress a freedom?

That's what I'm confused about what word to use.

 

[labRat]

1. inexplicably
2. not so free

 

[janiecakes]

2. restricted? suppressed?

 

[MoFo]

Thank you! Those are all great.

I'll use "restricted" and see as well. Yay.

 

[Torso]

1. haphazardly
2. hindered

 

[quantumize]

1. beligerently [sp?]
2. suppressed

 

[MoFo]

Originally posted by Torso
1. haphazardly

Oooooooooh, that's good too!

 

[rubytuesday]

1)carelessly, coarsely, rashly?

 

[Dam That SnarkEE Kid]

1) peenly
2) peened.

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[janiecakes]

1. arrogantly?

 

[rubytuesday]

2)abused, ignored, waylaid(?)

 

[quantumize]

which ones are you gonna use sunnita ?

 

[PosTMOd]

1) Russell obtusely opines,"... ['states' sounds objective]

2) cheekily checked

 

[MoFo]

The thing is, this is not an academic writing class. I'm taking art criticism 401.

So "opines" might alienate some readers. Haha.
"Cheekily cheeked" and "peen" are good though.

 

[terrawrist III]

Originally posted by MoFo
Oooooooooh, that's good too!

perfect...I mean who uses that word??...it's too perfect to pass up

 

[PosTMOd]

It's the one-two punch of "obtusely opines" that makes it work... and I just used 'cheekily checked' because I was on a 30-second alliterative rant.

For 2), go for something violent...


...and I don’t remember having freedom being castrated from us in a gallery situation, left bloody like a eunuch, torn asunder, what are we the U.S. of fucking A? No, we're not-- we're wimpy weasels, we...are...Canadian.

 

[LivingRoomPornstar]

In a painfully delusional offering, Russell says "

ahhh that's reaching.

 

[Torso]

Originally posted by LivingRoomPornstar
In a painfully delusional offering, Russell says "

I LIKE IT!!!

 

[The Tesseract]

I don't understand the context of the sentence... but whatever.


Ide right it liak dis.

Russell curtly states "to be presented with the idea [of what a piece of art in a gallery is trying to express] you have to read the curator's explanation." Now, the last time it came to attention, there was something called freedom in this city and I don't remember this freedom being withheld in a gallery situation. The choice to look away from the textual explanations displayed by the institution is quite effortless and still valid, unlike passing by a bloody scene of an accident on the 401.




Take out the first person, it looks bad. Don't refer to yourself is often the best thing to do when writing a critique.

 

[LivingRoomPornstar]

i guess obstructed might work for number 2, but it doesn't sound artsy enough, heh.

Dan