It's sounds pretty good if your just starting out in my opinion, it quite impressed me. It does have structure. Layers come in and out in a more or less logical fashion. I like the pauses that you do, they take away from the repetitiveness of the track and make it more interesting. Some sound effects would further complement the track making transitions easier.
I'm thinking a combination of something rought and something pretty. It would complement the track as you have some good rough elements along side some nice sounds. I'm just thinking about sounds fading in and out, swirly things swooshes and such.
it's definitely not a tech-house track... too progressive and stuff with the samples and breakbeat etc.
my suggestion would be to add more variation to the shaker pattern. or atleast change the volume of it over the course of the track.... bring it in and out etc. and what happened to that cymbol? you could do more with that too to bring it into focus and out of focus...... you kinda punch it in and out.
there's lots going on in the track sample wise. the kick isn't as prominate as it "could" be....... and that be-bop sample is great with the delay on the end...
but definitely get to the meat of the track earlier.... or elude to where you're going with the track earlier. that be-bop sample feels like the REAL intro to the song.
but yeah... the 4/4 kick isn't strong and totally falls away in the middle of the track. bring that back in and make it the pulse of the track.... OR go breakbeat and add more fills and variation to your breakbeat.
not to step on toes or anything.... IMHO it's a great start, but needs focus and definitely more variation in the "sparkle sounds".